The art is pretty decent although a higher res scan would have made the lines a little smoother. Although I have to chime in with others regarding it being difficult to read, not just the font choice, but the text could be trimmed and a bit more to the point.
Also if it's meant to be part of the Marvel continuity Ultra Magnus had only recently been given life, just prior to his comic appearance as outlined in both Target: 2006 and the profile that was written for him.
Now this is just personal preference so please don't take any offence - there's no hint that Magnus has a smaller Optimus style body within him any of his Marvel appearances and whenever I see it being done it annoys me, but as I said that's just me.
The first panel is meant to be reminiscent of Prime on his death-bed in the original movie, but I had just re-read all the Marvel UK comics so a few more influences then intended may have slipped in, the last panel especially, after I had drawn it I had the same fought as you.